Ive Said This Before
That I would sit foreverand just watch you move me from that distance.The moon leavesits roundness behind. The room takes its cornersinto sunlight.In being here,youve let all the worldbe my attention.
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love this notion, in you being here, you' ve let all the world be at my attention. Very well said
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Jill This is beautiful. I like the way you combine the elements of the moon and sun. The light lets go of its roundness, the circular routine of the world and takes it into the corners, the hidden...
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Hi Eden-The title does not tone equally with the poem's lovely sentiment.I told you so is what comes to mind though it isn't the poem's message. But it might turn readers off.That would be a...
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hi eden,I know the truth of this poemyou are original in what you writeand your voice makes poetry appear easydorothyPoetry Blue
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jill, i like it a lot. it also occurred to me that you could end it with"attend to me."
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for your comments and suggestions....will think about tightening this up, yolee..and ending it differently, jim. regardsedenNavel Orange
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Wonderful poem, Eden.This is emotionally powerfulwith that sitting forever and watching almost outside oneselfas such a love moves the speaker from a distance.And the images in the second stanza are...
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i'll think about the title some more. glad you liked this. always appreciate your insightful comments.regardsedenNavel Orange
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